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Audience essay feedback:

WWW:

·         Wow – this is phenomenal! You’ve written over 1,000 words which demonstrates that you’re really stepping up to the challenges of GCSE level. Well done!

·         There are so many good points here where you discuss both audiences and industry in relation to the internet. You’ve also addressed the power of conglomerates and brought in some media effects theory. This is seriously impressive!

EBI:

·         This is an easy one: paragraphs! You need to work on organising your extended writing and constructing an argument. This means planning your paragraph structure and in particular working on topic sentences – the first sentence in a paragraph. Make sure every topic sentence focuses on the question and develops your argument.

·         Clearer sentence structure – pay more attention to spelling, grammar and word choice. You have excellent content but you need to proofread your work to check it makes grammatical sense for your reader. At GCSE level, good written English is essential!

·         In terms of this essay, the newspaper section is weaker than film and music so that’s one to keep an eye on in future.

LR:

·         Complete the LR tasks on the GCSE Media Year 1 blog – Audience and Industry essay feedback LR

1) Copy and paste your feedback from the email in full - WWW, EBI and LR.
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2) What was the word count for your essay?
10243) What was your strongest paragraph? Why do you think it was better than others?
The TV because it had the most points4) What was your weakest paragraph? Why do you think it wasn't as good as others?
Newspapers because you said so5) How can you improve your extended writing in GCSE Media Studies in future?
maybe i could include the same amount in each paragraph6) Write ONE thing you have learned about the internet, audience and industry from completing this essay.
That the news paper has more power than we think.